The active agency of the feathers allows the continuity of the opening narrative to be understood, and allows it to flow and move the narrative forward. The continuity of the two initial characters discovering a third is also understood. However, once characters 1 and 2 enter the bedroom, the feathers disappear, making them now look like a MacGuffin. But I hope this is only because the work is not finished. (feedback provided by Reno Anastasio – Mon Mar 21 2022)
Your character designs are elegant and intriguing, and the proportions are accurate. The 1940s period was also a good choice, as not many people would go for that in a comic. There is lots of movement throughout the panels and expressive facial expressions. I find it challenging to understand the characters’ goals, but these are just the early stages of the story, and I am sure I will understand more as more detail is added.
Reno Anastasio
The active agency of the feathers allows the continuity of the opening narrative to be understood, and allows it to flow and move the narrative forward. The continuity of the two initial characters discovering a third is also understood. However, once characters 1 and 2 enter the bedroom, the feathers disappear, making them now look like a MacGuffin. But I hope this is only because the work is not finished. (feedback provided by Reno Anastasio – Mon Mar 21 2022)
Shannae Jaccard
Your character designs are elegant and intriguing, and the proportions are accurate. The 1940s period was also a good choice, as not many people would go for that in a comic. There is lots of movement throughout the panels and expressive facial expressions. I find it challenging to understand the characters’ goals, but these are just the early stages of the story, and I am sure I will understand more as more detail is added.