I suggest trying to find places where the narrative can be edited for brevity. For example, on page 1 just have a picture of the protagonist standing beside the table, reaching for the book and exiting the room (reduced to 3 or 4 frames).
The POV is 3rd-person and is clear, and maintained throughout. It is clear that the storybook is the central focus that carries the narrative and therefore anchors the continuity. This is enough to allow the viewer to give their own meaning to the magic stone’s significance, which, as the narrative develops, becomes another anchor point in the continuity of the narrative. (feedback provided by Reno Anastasio – Mon Mar 21 2022)
The character and creature designs are very interesting and different from one another. There is a lot of emotion when necessary and it is incredibly effective. The setting is detailed and the plot is very structured. The viewer can definitely understand where the protagonist is and what they are doing. The main characters design is also consistent, making the storyboard much clearer. The proportions are also very accurate which makes the story believable. I don’t think there are supposed to be words in your comic but I could be wrong (the book, etc.) Overall I am intrigued to see how this story progresses overtime.
Reno Anastasio
I suggest trying to find places where the narrative can be edited for brevity. For example, on page 1 just have a picture of the protagonist standing beside the table, reaching for the book and exiting the room (reduced to 3 or 4 frames).
Reno Anastasio
The POV is 3rd-person and is clear, and maintained throughout. It is clear that the storybook is the central focus that carries the narrative and therefore anchors the continuity. This is enough to allow the viewer to give their own meaning to the magic stone’s significance, which, as the narrative develops, becomes another anchor point in the continuity of the narrative. (feedback provided by Reno Anastasio – Mon Mar 21 2022)
Shannae Jaccard
The character and creature designs are very interesting and different from one another. There is a lot of emotion when necessary and it is incredibly effective. The setting is detailed and the plot is very structured. The viewer can definitely understand where the protagonist is and what they are doing. The main characters design is also consistent, making the storyboard much clearer. The proportions are also very accurate which makes the story believable. I don’t think there are supposed to be words in your comic but I could be wrong (the book, etc.) Overall I am intrigued to see how this story progresses overtime.