Both the shifting POV and continuity remain clear throughout the narrative. There is excellent use of action lines which help strengthen the very active and action-oriented narrative of the two bounty-hunter protagonists. In the bar scene, the use of frame narrative encapsulated inside dialogue bubbles is an awesome technique used to overcome the rule of “no text.” The continuity of how the two protagonists are now in the tavern (how they got there) is the only place where it is not totally clear. (feedback provided by Reno Anastasio – Mon Mar 21 2022)
Reno Anastasio
Both the shifting POV and continuity remain clear throughout the narrative. There is excellent use of action lines which help strengthen the very active and action-oriented narrative of the two bounty-hunter protagonists. In the bar scene, the use of frame narrative encapsulated inside dialogue bubbles is an awesome technique used to overcome the rule of “no text.” The continuity of how the two protagonists are now in the tavern (how they got there) is the only place where it is not totally clear. (feedback provided by Reno Anastasio – Mon Mar 21 2022)